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use this feed back to fix the essay : 
I can see the connection between Willy’s

use this feed back to fix the essay : 
I can see the connection between Willy’s cowardice and the psychological lens.
I think your essay map points give too much detail. Save the points for the body paragraph. Just focus on Willy so I would get rid of the first sentence of point 1. 
I feel like you need to also connect your thesis more to the question about his death and who is more responsible for his suicide. How does his cowardice in not confronting his inner turmoil connected to the psychological lens? is he mentally sane? 
Your quotes are not properly documented. They need to say (Miller page number) after them. 
What do you mean by his “grandiose self-image that conflicts with reality”, what is his reality? That he is a failure as a salesman? You need to prove that then. 
In paragraph 2, I do not need an explanation of the metaphor, but a continuation of how his mental health results in his death. Explain the quote in relation to the thesis and how you are proving that. 
I do not understand body paragraph 3 topic sentence, Please reword. 
And why are you talking about the tragic hero? in paragraph 3 again you are not connecting the points to his death and the psychological aspect of it 

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